Flawless, Part 2 of chapter 1

The four girls strolled through Sak's, absent-mindedly picking things up and putting them down. But after two hours of shopping things were bound to get ugly.

"I think I'm going to wear that new Anna Sui for Victoria's Secret lingirine to Spencer's Strip-Poker thing on Friday."Anna stated exaimning a large Louis Vuitton dufflel.

"Ha! You are so funny Anna! You heard me say that in the car and now your pretending to steal my idea."Haley sneered under her breath. "After all Spencer is my boyfriend,I deserve to look sexy in front of him."

"Who said Spencer thinks you're sexy?After all, ever scince you're family hired that new maid that cooks all that Italian food you've well, not been looking fit enough to be squeezing your thighs in to a pair of hot shorts-"Anna said,giving Hailey the brutal once over "Or those pants." She concluded,looking back at the brown monogram duffel.

"And you think Spencer's going to find you sexy? Oh yeah over bleached hair is very attractive."Hailey mumbled, holding a casmere cardigan up to her torso.

"And so are nose jobs. Cuhm-Awn Hailey. Everyone knows you didn't go to Saint Bart's last Christmas. You went to Doctor Bartlett's upstate. We saw your family's car driving back 2 days before the end of break. You were in the back with swolen eyes and a bandage on your nose!" Anna smiled pleased with herself.

"If you saw me driving back 2 days before break, then you weren't really clubbing with Ashton and Demi in L.A. You were too bust stalking me!" Hailey spun around to face Anna.

"Stalking You ! I think we all know who the stalker is here. 'Miss I love how I can see Spencer get naked out my bedroom window!' Oh yeah, I'm the stalker." The girls locked eyes for a spilt second then turned away.

"Anna! Does this dress make my forearms look big?" Whitney asked,modeling the houndstooth shift.

" 'Scuse me, Tubberbelle. Anna needs to aprove this nightie for Spencer's party." Macey pushed Whitney out of her way and spun around in the tiny see-thru plum nightgown.

"Whitney first. No your forearms dfon't look big but the print will definatley help with the return trip of that cheeseburger you wolfed down for lunch."Anna informed."It's a given no."

"Now me!" Macey said eagerly.

"Cute but buy new underwear. The boys don't wan't to see your granny-panties."

"Well,well,well. If it isn't the queen of class advising her friend to dress like a S-L-U-T." Hailey fiered looking at the barley there chiffon that hardley covered Macey's tiny frame.

" Join a convent, Sister Hailey. Being sexy is classy. Being slutty is trashy. Besides That nighty is Mochino, and I really don't think those wealthy Italian wemon are designing for the slutty set." Anna defended.

"Yeah."Macey said pathetically.

"Suhm-One find me a bathroom!"Whitney moaned,"If I don't get this thing out of my system, I'm gonna gain like 5 pounds."

"Come on Whitney, we'll find one. Now will you excuse me for a moment I have some important issues to deal with." Anna put a thin arm around Whitney and spun around on her Malono pump.


I'll post chapter 2 soon...tell me what you think.

it's still a little bit confusing. it seems like everything is happening at once, with no character development. it seems to be all dialogue, which would be okay except that the content isn't really there.

you have the potential to write, but you need to think your story out a little more.

p.s. you should post further chapter continuances in under the same topic as replies, okay?

Chapter 2

"Where should we eat? I'm starving!" Whitney said as the girls walked out of Sak's in to the cold Februrary air.

"We can walk to Ming Gardens." Macey offered.

"Nah,I'm in the mood for something lighter. None of that cats and dogs with soy sauce crap for me."Anna replied, sliding her oversized black Coach sunglasses."Lets go to Mood instead."

"Oh my gawd, are you joking? Muh-ood? Hello, that freaky place where they play all that african music and only serve vegitables!" Haley laughed out loud.

"Fine if you want to be so selective, you find us a decent resturaunt."Anna challenged.

In one swift motion, Haley took her Dolce & Gabbana limited edition RAZR out of her Louis Vuitton Damier tote and dialed 411.

"Hullo, yes I need to find an upscale resturaunt between 5th and Madison." She said in to the thin gold phone,"Uh huh, Thai Palace. Okay, thanks." She snapped the phone shut and dropped it in her purse.

"Well.." Anna tapped her Cranberry Malono on the dirty side walk.

"Thai Palace. An upscale asian establishment with a veiw of the skyline."Haley shrugged.

"It better be good, Miller."Anna threatend, wrapping her thin fingers around the wax handles of the black Sak's 5th Avenue shopping bags. Haley felt pleased with herself. For the first time in their 9 year friendship Anna was taking her seriously.

"Cuh-awn girls." Anna walked ahead, and stopped abruptly."Wait where are we going?"

"323 Madison."Haley answered, collecting her own bundle of bags. The girls walked through the streets of Manhattan like young versions of their socialite mothers. Their 5inch shoes clicked against the concrete,and their large dark designer sunglasses hid their perfectly lined eyes.

"So anyway, I think I'm going to buy one of those new Miu Miu skinny belt things."Whitney said, as they passed Bloomingdales. "I really need belts."

" Shut up. I need belts. I only have seven that are cute enough to wear." Macey said.

"I need more of that Mac Lip Glass stuff. " Anna said, white applying a fresh coat of Cherry Bomb.

"I'm so getting red and zebra skinny jeans." Haley said as a rocker loking girl passed wearing zebra stovepipes.

As they neared the resturant, Haley's stomach began to churn."What if Anna hates my choice?" She thought to her self,"Or what if I say something stupid and she gets embarassed?"

"Were he-re!" Anna sung, stealing a glance at Haley,who was picking at her cuticle nervously.However, what was about to catch Anna's attention would be way more important than watching her friend ruin her manicure.

heyy mckayy!!! i think theyy are REALLYY goodd but gossip girl is right take your time to introduce the charactersss

i agree! it's good! but you might wanna slow down a bit and introduce us 2 the characters! you're good with dialogue but you might wanna add in a bit of the characters' thoughts! u know, 2 get 2 know them better! ;)