hip hop tracks

[Rawthentic]

As some of you know, I like to work with hip hop. Ive recorded stuff in the past, but I took a break, and so hopefully now Im a bit better. I only have on track uploaded so far, and I'd appreciate it if comrades listened to it and critiqued it here. In this track its just me, but Im working with a partner.

Thanks

link: Mad Brothers (Phonder and Vivid Visionary)

[SELUCHA]

Well I already gave you my feedback on this but I'll post it here as well to get the conversation going.

I thought the flow was pretty good for the most part, it only sounds forced a couple times. My main recommendation is to sound a little more enthusiastic and talk louder into the mic. This does not mean just turn up the volume on the voice track, but your voice has a timbre of being spoken too quietly, like you're trying not to wake the neighbors or some shit. I'm no expert here, but that's mainly what I'd work on. Overall I thought it was solid lyrically, just gotta turn up the uggggghhhhhh factor yadidamean??? Lmao, I'll try to get something up sometime soon and we can mutually critique and assist each other.

[SELUCHA]

While we're posting some of our musical endeavors, I thought I'd share an instrumental of my creation. Rawthentic has heard this one before but perhaps others will give it a listen as well!

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7150225