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|Blitz||Posted on Jan 9 2013, 05:26 AM|
|*psh* We've only got, like, four topics that are genuinely "fresh" around here. Necro away!|
|Zaealix||Posted on Jan 8 2013, 11:55 PM|
| Hrm...Not necessarily a fan-fic, but I do have an idea of a character that would be rather compatible (I tend to work with magic much more than sci-fi technology these days!)
'Mad Dragon's Gore.'
Also, cool fan-fic, I'm curious how and where exactly things are going to go from here...Avatar has invulnerability enough to survive The End of All Things, but no other extraordinary powers, and some rather glaring limits, from the perspective of being a God-like being.
EDIT: DOH! I totally necro'd an old old thread. Sorry for getting your hopes up Blitz!
|Blitz||Posted on Oct 22 2011, 02:30 PM|
| I think you could get away with presenting the conversation in mostly linear terms if you preface it a bit of lampshade hanging, along the lines of "Obviously, a conversation that took place outside of linear time would be impossible to accurately reproduce in linear writing. However, if you'll permit some sloppy, imprecise editing and allow a very generous margin of error, a rough approximation this conversation would go as follows:"
...you might now want to use any many big words as I did, I think introducing the general idea of "This isn't how it REALLY went, but it's as close to the real thing as any of us can comprehend" would give you enough wiggle room to do what you want.
|Seros Senric||Posted on Oct 22 2011, 01:13 AM|
| Yeah, I really do think there should be some of their conversation there, but I had a few problems, one big one being, how do I represent them communicating?
No time effectively means that they know all the actions they ever take in the void, cause and effect no longer apply, which is something we have no idea how to deal with.
Because of that, a standard conversation might not work, we are used to conversations going from Person A first mentions the Winslow, Person B asks what the Winslow is, Person A explains the Winslow, while it's just as possible without time to be Person B asks what the Winslow is, Person A explains the Winslow, Person A first mentions the Winslow, or any other order, since there isn't really any order between them at all.
It's amazing how difficult it can be to represent a conversation where you already know the answer to the question you are about to ask because you have already asked it, and you will ask again, even though you only ask the question once. All the decisions you make in a timeless environment are as both from if no events have took place and if all the events that happen have already taken place and everything in between.
I'll probably end up adding more about their conversation just before the "By virtue of..." bit, and probably also add more about the council since I decided to drop the bit in the prequel of the details of the next universe being decided at a committee meeting. (Still going by it happened like that, but without it we stay focused on our protagonist and don't know stuff that she doesn't - which is fitting considering)
Although there were a few things that in my opinion were interesting in that segment that Avatar most likely won't get the chance to find out...
I would also like to add some (but not much) about some of the previous universes the eldritch abomination had experienced, some of that should be interesting, as well as some seemingly random stuff. And probably about other Old Ones. After all, its a rather exclusive club.
And, as I've mentioned to the friends I got to read the fanfic, having a character designed to survive past the end of the universe made it too easy
I started this whole thing because of basically two things from the comic, one was that the way the universe worked in it it seemed like it was designed by committee or something, and the other, which was a bigger cause of this fanfic, was in the comments on page 350 there was a part of a discussion on whether Avatar was an Old One or not. And then I thought that that was just too awesome and had to be run with. It took until a few days ago for me to actually do anything about it though.
|Blitz||Posted on Oct 21 2011, 12:29 PM|
I don't know what I was expecting the rest to be, but I'm pretty sure it didn't involve Avatar becoming one of the Old Ones.
...which is TOTALLY FREAKING AWESOME!!!!!
Eer, yes. Fascinating indeed. I do think some samples of just what was actually said during that encounter would be good. Aside from the fact that conversing with an eldritch abomination (and finding that it apparently sees you as an equal) sounds really fascinating, I get the feeling that the rhythm of the thing would benefit from lengthening that bit. Of course, it's hard to be sure about that sort of thing when the work is still in progress, but that's the impression I get at the moment.
So yeah, I greatly approve
|Seros Senric||Posted on Oct 21 2011, 09:27 AM|
| Well, although I do have better things to do, I'll post some more just because I can.
I had already written this when I posted the first section, and there's still another couple of sections that I had already written as well.
Partly why I didn't post this section before was because I didn't know if I was going to change it or not, and I'm still not sure about that, but anyway.
---STORY EXTRACT FOLLOWS---
Avatar woke up. The nova had been interesting, if uncomfortable, but there seemed to be something wrong other than the complete lack of anything else in the universe. It was only when she tried to determine how long ago the nova was that she realised. Time and space was folding in on itself.
It seemed that the universe really was ending, and not just because of heat-death.
Avatar somehow sensed it as the fabric of reality tore itself apart to be replaced by nothing. She was in the Void.
Avatar had only encountered the Void twice previously, the first time was at a mad scientist's convention where it was explained to her by the nicest mad scientist Avatar had ever met, after it had been caused by her father (that being the mad scientist's father).
That explanation had made no sense, and Avatar still didn't get an adequate explanation the second time she encountered the Void. But now that she was in it, and there didn't seem to be a universe anymore, Avatar felt like she understood.
Of course, here, time was meaningless, so while she had thought all this through before this entity showed up, she'd also thought it all through after it had shown up and left, simultaneously. Or as close to simultaneously as you can get without any time to get in the way. And that is also how she knew that there was going to be a new universe that she was going to be apart of, but while she was in the Void she could only know up until she left it, for then time started again and things would go back to normal. Or to a new normal, as would more likely be the case.
The entity seemed nice. Avatar didn't understand how they managed to communicate, but somehow they did. She also got the impression that it was large, had tentacles, and would otherwise be some form of non-Euclidean transdimensional eldritch creature or something, but of course without space or light she couldn't be sure.
They spoke of many things, having effectively an eternity to do so, as well as no time at all. And that is how she learnt about how the universes seemed to work.
It seemed that each new universe was decided by a council, that were gradually trying to create a universe that worked as well as the original one, but they hadn't got there yet, and most of them had various experimentations that they thought could be interesting. This explained why the universe Avatar was used to made so little sense at times.
Avatar found that she enjoyed the entity's company, and didn't get bored with discussion spanning over seven different universes, the ones the entity had experienced. This made Avatar almost feel that going through the same thing herself wouldn't be so bad after all. By virtue of surviving past the end of the universe she was now considered a Great Old One, a being not limited by the bounds of reality as the natives of each universe were. Of course that didn't help Avatar much, since she had no way of warping reality or travelling through five dimensional space like the entity she was talking to did. But the discussion did allow her to feel ready for the next universe, no matter what it could bring. After all, once it was done, she'd be able to talk again. And who knew? Perhaps they'd meet inside the universe. After all, they would have all of time.
---END OF STORY EXTRACT---
Less sure about this part, mainly because I feel like I should put more about what they discussed in there somewhere, but that would require me to make up stuff that was actually interesting, and fit it in there in a way that didn't seem forced. Which I probably could do if I tried...
|Blitz||Posted on Oct 20 2011, 02:56 AM|
|*waits in anticipation*|
|Seros Senric||Posted on Oct 20 2011, 01:40 AM|
| Yeah, I find that during exam periods, my anime and cartoon watching goes down because I know I should be studying, but story writing and programming projects increase because I really don't want to study and those are kind of close enough to be work without actually being work.
Thankyou for apparently liking it
This is my first fan-fiction (unless you count the complete outline of a game based in Hazard's Wake continuity that I'll probably end up devoting a couple weeks to sometime in order to actually make it), usually I only do original stories. Maybe I'll put extracts of some of those up somewhere at some point.
As I said, I do have more, but I'm going to want to actually get to where stuff is actually happening before I put much more of it up here...
But yeah, the beacon was because I wanted to have enough stuff on basically how pretty much everything except Avatar was gone that hopefully the reader could understand at least partially just how much it sucks. And stuff. Should give a nice starting point to what happens afterwards.
|Blitz||Posted on Oct 20 2011, 12:06 AM|
| First off, I fully (if unadvisedly) endorse not working on things that really ought to be worked on. I am NEVER more creatively productive than when I really REALLY ought to be doing something more important.
Second OHMYGOSHOHMYGOSHOHMYGOSH FAR OUT THERE FAN FICTION! I can't even begin to properly express how ridiculously cool that is! Even if it is just a fragment, that's still UNBELIEVABLY AWESOME!!!
...and GOOD too! I especially like the bit about the distant beacon, that's a neat touch! You be sure to let me know when the whole thing's done (or at least close enough to "done" to be seen)
|Seros Senric||Posted on Oct 19 2011, 06:02 AM|
| Well, I started writing an Avatar fanfic instead of studying for exams, and although it isn't very good I figure I'll post some of it here.
I've got like 2 or so pages of it, but don't feel like putting the rest of it up because what I have it kind of ends just before a collision with a cliff face. It's much nicer just having the first paragraph or so that is before the story actually starts. That and I don't know if I'll end up finishing it yet, so it means that if I feel like posting more I'll have some material even if I don't write any more.
---STORY EXTRACT FOLLOWS---
She was alone, as she had been for longer than she cared to think about. Alone, on what was left of a derelict space station orbiting an abandoned, dead, planet.
She was standing at one of the windows, which was simply a hole straight out into space. Containment hadn't been high on her list of priorities, it wasn't as if she needed an atmosphere anyway. She didn't look down at the planet, she remembered too clearly the people that once lived upon it. Unlike the rest of the universe they had been almost sane. Instead she looked out at a single speck of dim light, from a long dead star. That star was close to where she had first met the captain of The Exposition, Crosby. He had been the first person to show her kindness since she'd been kicked out of an airlock by mad scientists millennia ago. The time with him had been fun, especially when Ichabod had picked up Layla and Trigger. But they were all long dead now. But then so was everyone else.
Even the messages from the outpost a galaxy away had stopped being received. Given the time taken for them to travel, it must have happened long ago.
Avatar considered going back inside and rewatching one of the billions of movies she had seen millions of times, but decided against it. Instead she went out and looked towards the sun. It was so old she was surprised that it was still there. But not as surprised as after a few moments of looking towards it, it decided to go nova.
"Great," Avatar thought to herself. "Just what I need, the entire system I'm in is about to go kaput, and even if I could get away from it there isn't anywhere left to go."
Avatar decided to make the best of it, after all this was the most exciting thing to happen for over a thousand years, made a makeshift chair outside the station hovering in the 0g environment of space. She didn't bother with a tether since it wasn't like there was going to be anything left to be tethered after it was over. She sat (a feat quite difficult to do in zero gravity but Avatar had had lots of practice) and watched the approaching shockwave.
---END OF STORY EXTRACT---
As I said, not very good. But that is basically half of the prologue. The other half of the prologue isn't actually that important though, since so far in what I have of the story you find out most of what's in it through the normal story stuff or whatever that is called.
(In case you didn't realise, I am bored and I don't want to study damnit)