Second Generation, Their kids!!!

[lyokofanforever]

Yep... I'm making a Fanfic. Never been to good at it tho, so don't expect to much. I'm not like YumiRulz


Ulrich and Yumi FINALLY got together and eventually got married, and had a girl named Emi. Jeremie and Aelita (naturally) married and had a boy named Adam. They are now 13 and go to (what a surprise) Kadac Acadamy, where, of course, Jim is still the Gym Teacher. Adam and Emi, much like UxY, were secretly in love with each-other. About a year ago, Jeremie had explained to the kids about Lyoko and how, (oh brother), a few shreds of XANA remained. So, Adam and Emi have currently been fighting XANA instead of their parents. Jeremie was still the one working the Super Computer from earth.


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One early morning, Adam Belpois and Emi Stern were walking to their school together. "XANA hasn't attacked lately, its been nearly a weekl" Emi remarked. "Yep. Definatly not normal. He usually attacks once every couple of days, at the least!" Adam replied." 5 minutes later, they were at the school. "Oh, no." Adam groaned. "Since when do we have Gym first peirod?" Asked Emi. "STERN, BELPOIS!!!" Jim yelled. GET OVER HERE NOW!" Suddenly, Adam's cell phone bliped. He quickly checked it. "Yes!" He shouted. "XANA attack!" "Finally," said Emi, "and just in time!" "Okay." Said Emi. You go to the Factory, and I'll make an excuse for Jim." Adam grinned. "Good luck! See ya!"

Adam took the sewer route to the Factory, where he found his dad already sitting at the Super Computer. "Hey, Dad. What's up?" Jeremy turned around quickly. His face was worried and urgent. "Where's Emi?" He barked. Adam was stunned. His dad was never like this. "Uh, she'll be here in a minute. She is trying to worm past Jim." Jeremie's face softened. "All right. Good." He said. "Whats going on?" Asked Adam. "Something very bad." Jeremie replied. "XANA has escaped completely and has taken a human image." "What do you mean?" Asked Adam. "XANA is now a polymorphic clone. He's out here on earth. Be careful. He could kill you." Adam gasped. "I've got to warn Emi!" "Exactly why I was so upset." Jeremie replied. "Well can't we deactivate him with a tower?" "Yes, but for only a short time."

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So what do you think so far? Sorry im not that good, but if I get some feedback then I will either keep writing, or just stop.

[lyokofanforever]

ok then if no one likes it I won't continue

[YumiRulz]

thanks for the compliment, I'm honored
if you think I'm good, you should read some of my brother's stuff... he only writes transformers, but he always knows ecxactly what word to use. whereas I am constantly getting help from MS word's synonym function so I don't end up repeating myself.

you want my honest opinion.... I admit it could be written better but the concept is great. I think it's awesome that the lyoko warriors may one day be officialy related... except for odd... he will never settle down

man, jim is still working after all this time. it should be time for him to retire about now, but if he were ever to leave kadic, then I would be searching for the hole in the universe.

a bit of advice: try to go inside the characters' heads when you write this. there's a book I read, I think it was screenwriting for dummies, and it has this whole section on building characters. you need to think about what their goals are and how they try to acheive them. kinda hard to do... I know there were simpler ones but I forgot....

[lyokofanforever]

thanks! I totally will take your advise

[YumiRulz]

please continue!

[lyokofanforever]

uh......... I'm not sure.

[YumiRulz]

okey dokey

I understand, I can't tell you how many unfinished projects I have laying around...

another tip: if something sounds weak, use the synonym function. it works wonders

[lyokofanforever]

ok I might contiue........ I just have to get around to it because I am under a lot of stress: school, the president of a club, main character AND director of a play we're putting on, homework, ect.

UGGGHHH!!!!!!!!

[YumiRulz]

I know what that's like... I remember having only 2 weeks to memorize/edit a scene during exam week...

[lyokofanforever]

ohhhhhh yuck

This post has been edited by lyokofanforever on Nov 11 2009, 04:10 PM